What I focussed on in this draft was getting my memories and feelings down about reading and writings and just answered all the questions on the prompt. What I failed to do is put it all in one connecting story. I feel I just rambled on and repeated myself some. Please give feedback how I might write this in one cohesive story, thank you.
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Your paper is good over all. I like how you explained what helped you with your reading and writing, do you think this will keep helping you later on?
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I like how you listed your sponsors, do you think these sponsors will keep helping you throughout your literacy experiences ?
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What do you think would be helping you right now besides your MacBook ?
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Maybe explain more on how video games has helped you back then and are they still helping you right now at the moment?
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Try making it MLA
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I would ask Dr. A what format you should be using for your story/essay
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Go more into detail with your story. Like all the examples you have just add the little things to it
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you also, need a title
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I enjoyed your examples of books you’ve enjoyed. What were the characteristics of The Kite Runner and The Hitch Hikers Guide to the Galaxy that made you appreciate reading more?
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In what ways did the games on your Leapster help you in your literacy experience?
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How have video games given you a positive experience for your reading and literacy experience? The audience may not know much about video games so explaining this could help them.
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What types of things did you write in your creative writing class? Going into detail about this or giving examples could help expand your story.
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